I’ve been refining my query letter over the last month and would love some feedback on it. What’s working? What’s not?

LOVE & CUPCAKES is a completed 92,500-word work of women’s fiction. With a dash of magical realism, it will appeal to fans of Sarah Addison Allen and Alice Hoffman.

At thirty-two, Jaclyn “Jack” Pace has given up on having a love life in favor of making her small-town cupcake bakery succeed. The only things standing in her way are two big secrets.

One: Jack can smell desire. Not in the a-wild-bear-can-smell-fear kind of way, but in the physical, literal sense. When she comes within two feet of people desperate for something sweet to eat, she can tell with one inhaled breath exactly what they crave. Though her ability comes in handy at work, her customers are more freaked out than intrigued when they discover what she can do.

Two: She’s in love with her business partner, Graham. But given the legend that says Hollingsworth men will recognize their soul mates at first touch, Jack is resigned to the fact that she’s not his. More than fifteen years before, they shared one mind-melting kiss that she can’t stop thinking about. Graham hasn’t gotten that close to her since. But the way he watches her when he thinks she’s not looking gives her the feeling that he remembers it too. Jack can’t tell whether it’s the legend that keeps him at a safe emotional distance or if he only sees her as a friend. Either way, she’s not willing to risk losing him forever by confessing feelings he can’t—or won’t—return.

When her estranged sister, Harper, comes back to town with secrets of her own—and an affinity for making art out of icing—Jack finds that she and Harper have something in common for the first time since they were kids. And confiding in each other just might help them wind up with everything—and everyone—they’ve ever wanted.

I earned a BFA in creative writing from the University of North Carolina – Wilmington. For the past six years, I have worked as a marketing copywriter and proposal editor.

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